Brighton Solidarity issue 1

I thought it was pretty good, although aren't you selling out by showing a Michael Moore film?

a few minor points

Your France thing is a little inaccurate.
The air rifle (if he's talking about the incident at Censier/Tolbiac) was an old guy randomly shooting at someone rather than a fascist group.
Also the kid that was shot in the face in Caen was shot using a flashball (rubber bullet type gun, I think similar to baton rounds but I'm not sure.) rather than a gun.

I'd change this if I were you, it's a bit clumsy.

Stop using the word muppets it sounds stupid.
And don't describe yourselves as working class

chumps
scags
dregs of society
liberals
?

Getting really picky (seriously, design work is a good 50% about being an anal bastard) design bits:

Pg1: You can knock 'NHS for sale' down a line, it's not level at the bottom and give it a bit of space from the intro box. Words in the Inside bar can be bigger as there's plenty of room.

Pg2: More gap between the second par and the 'how this will affect you' needed, you're four lines shy on the third column... Who we are text is a bit close to the bottom of the box.

Pg3: France in revolt headline should be column wide at least, byline should probably be at the end really as that's the style in the 'where we stand' bit. Text is way too close to the 'you couldn't make it up' box I'd drop a couple of lines to make it fit better (never be afraid to massacre text to make it fit in properly ).

Pg4: Fine apart from the film nights block at the bottom is slightly too tall to match up to the front page bit.

Also when you're printing it you might want to swap the first two bits over otherwise you'll end up with the masthead and splash on the back page.

Writing bits: I'd go local on the front page, national on the inside. Your draw as a local collective is primarily your understanding of how things are directly affecting people where you are, no point in trying to tell them national stuff before framing it in their personal experiences, otherwise you're only talking to the abstract.

Yew slag.

Where's the fun in that?

Edit: Nah wasn't suggesting you had the running order wrong or anything, just as something for future issues - and bearing in mind that really good articles can run bigger on the inside than they can do on the outside...

shit I had you down as the anti-deutsch male feminist...

I thought Joseph K was the void at the centre around which the group was constructed.

well, i have missed a few meetings for spurious reasons...

the wsm tell me they do well off of it. Also, remember this is brighton, full of lefty weirdos.

Next one will have specific workplace stuff (me and jk have big high profile things happening at our workplaces) so will be more targeted.

While you 'analyse', i do. Be the change you want to see, comrade!

Just saw this edit. Yea, definitely agree- in principle we'd always wanna lead on a local angle.

i like the layout

i might set up a puppet account to talk about it, jack would be wise to too since he's still not changed his username.

It looks good. Great initiative. I see our mole is doing his job anyways, you're one word off being 'Workers Solidarity' and then once the subs go up we can send over the 'theoretical unity' team to enforce some 'collective discipline'.

Do any other Solfed branches have papers like this? They ought to.

Several.